Draft 1 – Edit

When I created my assembly edit, I noticed a lot of problems and how I could fix them. I’ve split this blog post in to the sections I said I wanted to change or correct.


Scene one:

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For scene one, I wanted to make the colours warmer. This makes the scene happier and more vibrant, creating a happier atmosphere. I want to scene to be happy as it makes the other scenes throughout the film seem more dramatic and problematic.


scene 2:

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With scene 2, I decided to make the colours more cold. I already chose a set with blues to match my colour scheme, but brining out the blue colours can emphasise it.



scene 3:

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With this scene, I added more blues and yellows. When I just added the blues, I thought the blue over powered the shot and it lost some of the depth. Adding the yellow brought out the signs more by outlining the words and pictures.


scene 4:

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With this scene I added more greens and blues. This again, brought the colours of the colour scheme out.


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I copied the same 3 way colour wheel over to the next shot so it looked the same.

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I did the same with shot 3.


scene 5:

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Scene 5 was more difficult to colour correct. The scene is way to dark as you can’t really see the character. I added more oranges and yellows to match the candle light glow, then raised the contrast and brightness. This added a more of a glow and brightness, that looks like its from the candles.


scene 8:

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This scene I thought was too dark. I changed the brightness, but then turned the contrast down. This made it brighter, but also created more shadows and toned down the colours. I think it makes the scene look more eery and he defiantly looks more threatening.



Scene 9:

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I filmed this scene on Friday and added it to my draft edit. I made the colour more blue, but then turned down the saturation. This made it seem greyer, but with the blues still standing out.


Scene 10:

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I added more greens and blues to this scene because I thought it was too dull to match the flow of the rest of the film. It didn’t really match the colour palate i’d chosen for the film. It’s a very subtle change but I think that it works well.


Scene 11:

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I did the same for this shot.


Scene 12:

Shot 1:

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With the van scenes, I want to make it dimmer and greyer. This was to show how miserable it was. I also added more blues in to make the scene colder.



Shot 2:

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I did the same for this scene….

Shot 3:

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and this scene….


shot 4:

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With this scene, I felt like it was too bright. I decreased the brightness and added more blue tones. This gave it a more inclosed and dark feel.


shot 5:

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I did the exact same thing with this scene.

Shot 6:

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… And this scene.

shot 7:

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With this scene, I used way too much light. I needed to bring the brightness and contrast right down. It makes the shot  seem more claustrophobic and dirtier.


Shot 9:

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With this scene enhanced the blues and made it slightly dimmer.


Scene 14:

Shot 1:


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This scene is the last if the film so I thought it needed to be perfect. I made the colours much bluer. This gives a colder feel to the scene.


Shot 2:

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I did the same for this shot.




In the scene where Malcolm (the Dad) is staring into the distance and is ready to protect his family, I want distant sounds of people and gunfire. This is so the audience can understand why he’s so scared and protective. For the sounds, I sourced them on youtube. With the sounds I layered them up.

  1. Cryings: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8QpldDrUu98
  2. Gun fire: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BhRJnLp4OlE
  3. Banging : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mBzgvb7uLyM
  4. Angry Crowd: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hIyuNT3gXGI

With the sounds, I wanted them to sound like they were coming from outside. To do this, I added a reverb, and changed the EQ.

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The next seen I worked on with adding sound was the scene with all the people that are lined up on their knees and someone get shot. For this scene, I needed the sound of a gun shot. In my assemebly edit I use this sound effect: Original gun shot (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LPYquBkEhSA) However, when I evaluated it, I decided the echo of the gun shot needed to be longer. After searching I found this one. New gun shot (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gLN_zuBFSSo0)






Credits and Title/Refining ending

In my draft I added credits and titles. I think its always to leave time to credit people who helped you when making a film.

However, I made my credits slightly different to what I’ve done before. From my last feedback, and my own realisation, my film didn’t have a very clear ending.




Copy of Draft and Feedback

This is the copy of the draft with all the changes made. There is still a lot I need to add in and refine before I make a final copy. I need to add in a few shot and make some shorter. Making them all similar will add consistency to my film.

I asked for feedback of my tutor and this is what her said:

I’m going to take on this advice, and edit my final film.

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